My only question is: Does it grab you and make you want to keep reading? If not, and if you don't mind saying, why? (I promise not to go all freakazoid on anyone as long as everyone promises to play nice. As always any rude comments will not be allowed to post.)
DLN - Chapter One, Page One
Something in my gut told me this rescue wasn’t going to be a bundle of fun, even before Basil’s wish went haywire. Nothing like being plopped on my ass in a mound of kudzu to confirm my suspicions.
About a hundred yards ahead of me stood the derelict warehouse mentioned in the alert. After verifying everything was still intact, I pulled my hair back into a ponytail while I made a mental note to chat with my assistant about his aim. No matter how urgent the circumstances seemed, losing focus in the middle of a job wasn’t kosher.
I took a step toward the building, cursing the plants tangled around my ankles and wondering how any Djinn could get misplaced in this locale. Maybe the alert was wrong. I created the alert system to help my brethren. For the most part, they were dead-on, but every once in a while an alert did come back false. Even the best system isn’t foolproof.
I didn’t struggle through more than a few feet of noxious vines before I sent a silent apology to Basil for doubting his aim. If the crackle in the air was any indication, his wish wasn’t the problem. The power emanating from within was more than enough to mess with any long-range magic. Hell, it was making the little hairs stand up on my arms.
Whichever one of the Many was inside, his emancipation would be well worth my clumsy landing. The sooner I released this brethren, the less chance some human could use him for those three little freebies all captive Djinn are required to grant.
And three wishes created with the power I was feeling would generate more chaos than any of us needed right now.------
And now the real angst can begin. Be gentle. ;o)